A pome for you (and a question)

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Date: 24 August 2010 12:23:56

First, the pome:

And He said...

The wedding guests were gathered

But we’d run out of wine

A stranger approached us

And He said it would be fine

He said “Fill the jars with water

And serve it to the guests”

As we did, it was transformed

To wine of the very best.

The hungry crowd was gathered

We had little food to spare

Then Jesus approached us

And He said “Give each a share”

So we walked amongst the people

Not sure how this could be

That from a meagre little lunch

They were fed abundantly.

The waiting world is gathered

Looking on expectantly

And He says “Go to the people

Tell my story, set them free”

We’re aware of our shortcomings

Of our lack and of our sin

But we can rise to each challenge

By His life, that dwells within.

Now, the question.

Is this any good?

A friend of mine is encouraging me to write more, with a view to seeking publication. I enjoy writing, and am happy to put some of my efforts on here (relatively safe place). However, I am not sure that my scribblings are of sufficient quality (or quantity for that matter) to warrant such encouragement. I feel that my poems have a kind of 'Beat Poem' quality to them - the one above being 'commissioned' by a local preacher to be read in one of her services. On the whole, I guess I am happy with some of my poems, but I am not sure if there would be a wider audience for them. If so, where would that be found anyway?

My attempt at short stories/prose leave much more to be desired, I think. For e.g., the opening salvo of my short story on here appeared to fall quite flat. I was hoping it would hook people to want to know more. Just out of interest, is anyone curious to know what happens next? I am wondering whether to write the next section in script form, rather than story form. I sense that my attempts at setting scenes are lacking, I think I may be better at conversation and abstract imagery than at straightforward description. In my own mind, pictures work best as pictures, I do not seem to have the ability to turn the stuff that is seen with the physical eye into good enough words to do it justice. Words or concepts come more easily to me, I feel.

Anyway, I said there would be a question. It appears to have thrown up a number of questions - over to you (please... :))